tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6912024698482592423.post9214313580582563970..comments2023-07-22T05:00:18.017-07:00Comments on negativespace: Lucho's Lament - Dive's 500 Word Challengeneetzyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08328078244870157157noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6912024698482592423.post-10462909571365963052009-08-13T15:33:46.152-07:002009-08-13T15:33:46.152-07:00Katherine,
Things might have turned out better fo...Katherine,<br /><br />Things might have turned out better for the both of them if I had more words (lol). I realized I had to end it quickly and death got the job done! The Pearl was depressing. I hope Dive has as lighter sentence for next week.<br /><br />Dear Prudence,<br /><br />I kinda felt the same way about Maria! The catty side of me was starting to show. Had I enough time to allow Maria to live longer, I the think the father would have become the real villain. Thanks for your comments.neetzyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08328078244870157157noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6912024698482592423.post-43589638072898690662009-08-13T13:06:45.847-07:002009-08-13T13:06:45.847-07:00Poor Lucho, screw Maria she had it better than him...Poor Lucho, screw Maria she had it better than him anyway! Just kidding. Great story and I agree about the word limit. I spend most of my time trying to reword to reduce.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6912024698482592423.post-14059485395871482802009-08-13T11:52:28.161-07:002009-08-13T11:52:28.161-07:00What a tragedy! It's all the sadder (and more...What a tragedy! It's all the sadder (and more powerful) because of the setting and obvious socio-economics that come into play. It reminds me of Steinbeck's "The Pearl."Katherinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17474979590755071985noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6912024698482592423.post-3662251627071669152009-08-13T08:29:17.695-07:002009-08-13T08:29:17.695-07:00Lulu,
Thanks so much. I would never consider mys...Lulu,<br /><br />Thanks so much. I would never consider myself "much" of a writer, although these exercises have been fun. I was going to pass on this one altogether, but oh well. Thanks for the kind words.<br /><br />Dive,<br />I can only envision things getting worse for Lucho (if I were to continue this story). I had to cut, cut, cut, to keep it to 500 words in a one-night sitting. Thanks for spurring me to do this. Weird stuff certainly comes up out of the recesses of my mind.<br /><br />Scout,<br /><br />The 500 words is definitely a challenge! As soon as I feel I'm really getting into it I have to start to end it. Then I have to Cut, cut, cut. Looking back I should have cut more. Oh well. I wasn't even going to do this one until I sat down last night.neetzyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08328078244870157157noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6912024698482592423.post-29485185203906568002009-08-13T07:09:03.086-07:002009-08-13T07:09:03.086-07:00No disclaimer necessary, Neetzy. This was a powerf...No disclaimer necessary, Neetzy. This was a powerful story—succinct but thorough. That's a real challenge I am finding in writing within this word limit.Scouthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06209638721810105979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6912024698482592423.post-35581794701912924152009-08-12T23:20:02.491-07:002009-08-12T23:20:02.491-07:00Brrr … A real horror story, this one, Neetzy.
Like...Brrr … A real horror story, this one, Neetzy.<br />Like Lulu, you really pulled me into their world.<br />Poor Lucho.<br />Poor Maria.<br />I so wanted them to be happy but with only 500 words and such a portentious opening sentence it was never going to end well.<br /><br />Sigh.divehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12938980502783421961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6912024698482592423.post-40450218765722337742009-08-12T19:21:10.649-07:002009-08-12T19:21:10.649-07:00Neetzy -
This was gut-wrenching. I could feel L...Neetzy - <br /><br />This was gut-wrenching. I could feel Lucho's horror. You pulled me right into Lucho's world. You ARE a writer.<br /><br />- LuluLulubelle Bhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08948915466861365657noreply@blogger.com