tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6912024698482592423.post2660576790709643925..comments2023-07-22T05:00:18.017-07:00Comments on negativespace: Business at Bartleby's (Dive's Writing Challenge)neetzyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08328078244870157157noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6912024698482592423.post-48464815712133043042009-08-06T17:42:04.448-07:002009-08-06T17:42:04.448-07:00Dive,
Thanks. My teenagers don't talk like t...Dive,<br /><br />Thanks. My teenagers don't talk like this (thankfully), but quite a few of my students do! At least I got to exactly 500 words this time!<br /><br />Scout, Thanks so much. There are a lot of these kids who are nice "underneath it all".<br /><br />Katherine,<br />Thank you. I am surrounded by this talk all the time. It' nice to finally put it to use!<br /><br />Shazza,<br />Why thank you.neetzyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08328078244870157157noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6912024698482592423.post-10246073772955229322009-08-06T10:42:56.404-07:002009-08-06T10:42:56.404-07:00That was great Anita!!! Loved it!That was great Anita!!! Loved it!Shazzahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02196666013653201878noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6912024698482592423.post-74383979414128384572009-08-06T10:35:23.938-07:002009-08-06T10:35:23.938-07:00Realistic dialog. Nice!Realistic dialog. Nice!Katherinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17474979590755071985noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6912024698482592423.post-52528434988265744742009-08-06T06:02:29.943-07:002009-08-06T06:02:29.943-07:00I really like the devoted son breaking all stereot...I really like the devoted son breaking all stereotypes. And the ending is just perfect—very refreshing and hopeful.Scouthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06209638721810105979noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6912024698482592423.post-33823260256185774242009-08-05T23:40:29.311-07:002009-08-05T23:40:29.311-07:00Whew! You built the tension to such a screamingly ...Whew! You built the tension to such a screamingly awful point, Neetzy, and then slapped me hard with a happy ending.<br /><br />Fantastic!<br /><br />I love the dialogue. Writing in vernacular can be tricky but you've got it down (ah, the mother of teenage kids … hee hee).<br /><br />Wonderful stuff, especially on second reading where all the love and hope sneaks out and makes us smile.divehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12938980502783421961noreply@blogger.com